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Housing shortages in big cities can cause severe social consequences.Some people think that only govenment action can solve this problem.To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Devastating social issues can be elicited by the lack of housing in metropolises, and while some
people
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 argue that only governments can resolve the problem, I completely agree with
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 point of view because they can change their development methodology and
increase
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 housing in suburbs. On the one hand, a housing shortage can be caused by an unplanned
increase
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 in
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city
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the city
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 population due to migration from the countryside.Many
people
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 have come to towns in order to have better
life
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living
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 standards because several remote
areas
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 do not have better education, transportation, and other basic amenities. If the
government
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 changes the country's economic policy from centralized to decentralized, rural
areas
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 can be developed. More funds should be allocated to improve rural hospitals, schools, and roads, and large private companies should be encouraged to start businesses outside of
cities
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. Migration can be significantly reduced
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 of the development of rural
areas
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, and
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 is likely to be a long-term solution to housing shortages.
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, governments can
increase
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 housing projects, particularly for low- and middle-income
people
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. Most housing projects are carried out by companies, which are expensive and not affordable for the poor.
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,
government
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 officials should actively participate in housing construction; at the very least, they should provide long-term loans for home purchases.
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, many
cities
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 do not have enough space for new apartments, particularly in the
city
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center
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, so the
government
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 should relocate new residential
areas
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 to the outskirts while
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 developing transportation and other facilities.
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, the Colombo municipal council decided to build homes for homeless
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;
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, they had to construct houses outside of the
city
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center
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 due to a lack of free space, and
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 the houses were far from the
city
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, new roads and railways had reduced the time of their commutes to the
city
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center
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. In conclusion,
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 of the
increase
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 in population in
cities
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, they have to face severe social issues due to the lack of housing in
cities
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. I believe that the
government
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 can only provide solutions for
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 problem by changing its policy and engaging with housing projects
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