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Housing shortages in big cities can cause severe social consequences.Some people think that only govenment action can solve this problem.To what extent do you agree or disagree

Devastating social issues can be elicited by the lack of housing in metropolises, and while some
people
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 argue that only governments can resolve the problem, I completely agree with
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 point of view because they can change their development methodology and
increase
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 housing in suburbs. On the one hand, a housing shortage can be caused by an unplanned
increase
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 in
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city
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 population due to migration from the countryside.Many
people
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 have come to towns in order to have better
life
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 standards because several remote
areas
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 do not have better education, transportation, and other basic amenities. If the
government
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 changes the country's economic policy from centralized to decentralized, rural
areas
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 can be developed. More funds should be allocated to improve rural hospitals, schools, and roads, and large private companies should be encouraged to start businesses outside of
cities
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. Migration can be significantly reduced
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 of the development of rural
areas
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, and
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 is likely to be a long-term solution to housing shortages.
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, governments can
increase
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 housing projects, particularly for low- and middle-income
people
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. Most housing projects are carried out by companies, which are expensive and not affordable for the poor.
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,
government
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 officials should actively participate in housing construction; at the very least, they should provide long-term loans for home purchases.
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, many
cities
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 do not have enough space for new apartments, particularly in the
city
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center
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, so the
government
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 should relocate new residential
areas
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 to the outskirts while
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 developing transportation and other facilities.
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, the Colombo municipal council decided to build homes for homeless
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;
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, they had to construct houses outside of the
city
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center
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 due to a lack of free space, and
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 the houses were far from the
city
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, new roads and railways had reduced the time of their commutes to the
city
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. In conclusion,
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 of the
increase
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 in population in
cities
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, they have to face severe social issues due to the lack of housing in
cities
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. I believe that the
government
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 can only provide solutions for
this
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 problem by changing its policy and engaging with housing projects

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