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Some think the best way to motivate and encourage people to work hard is to pay them based on how much they produce and sell. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Some people believe that
students
 should choose a major and
study
 what they really like while others clearly say that they should
study
 useful subjects
such
 as science and technology and things that are related to
this
. It is obviously believed that choosing a favourite major in university has always been an important issue for many
students
. Selecting and studying in your own major can bring benefits and advantages for you and your
future
.
Students
 have a great chance to adhere to their
future
 goals,
although
 they attain their ambitions and make good planning attentively for their life.They don’t waste their time on other use fewer subjects . Absolutely they can progress faster in their studies and comprehend lessons more deeply. On the other ,hand some people argue that they should only
study
 useful lessons that they really need in the
future
 like science and technology.They believe It can be more helpful and worthwhile for them
instead
 of working on their own interests . ,
However
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 if something like that happens to
students
 they don't have a chance for focusing on their favourite fields . They just
study
 advantageous things without any interest. They lost the chance for devoting their own opinions during their education.
Although
 they get confused about life’s priorities. In conclusion, In my view following pleasure and your own major is momentous for everyone . One of its consequences is in your learning and your
future
 job . Everybody needs to have a career move with love and it absolutely depends on your education.
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