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It is important for children to learn the diffrence between right and wrong ar an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what wxtent do you agree or disagree with this opinion. what sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children

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It is believed by a few people that if
children
 do any
kind
 of misbehaving
then
parents
 should teach them what is wrong and what is right for them with the help of punishment. I agree with the statement because the young age of
children
 is a vital part of their life young ones started to improve their personalities during that
time
. To make a youth responsible in the future
parents
 should guide them properly. If a child does any
kind
 of
offense
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offence
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 like fighting, thieve
then
parents
 must lead them in the right direction to avoid
this
kind
 of activity.
For example
, in one case, a child has become a criminal in the future if their
parents
 could not stop them in their teenage age to do bad things.
Moreover
, if
children
 are doing the wrong activity
then
parents
 should tell them a motivational story that encourages the child to do good work and they can
also
 build their personality.
However
, teenagers are not enough mature at a young age, so when teachers and
parents
 ask them to do proper work
then
 they can not understand how to do and what to do because of less understanding power so during that
time
parents
 need to be
patience
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patient
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.
Parents
 and teachers should be allowed to use only easy abuse because during school life
children
 are not able to understand properly and forcefully beating can hurt student's brains and they avoid to fo school.
For instance
, KKV school gives homework 2 times when a kid misbehaves so
this
kind
 of punishment helps
children
 to avoid wrong things and 2 times homework helps them to remember a lesson. To conclude, pupils require
time
 to live in discipline life, and during that
time
 faculty should help them quitely while forcefully hard torture leads students in the wrong direction.
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