Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements and this sets a bad example to the young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays it is true that various companies put advertisements
to
every corner of our world in the case of promoting their products. Some Change preposition
in
people
think that it has a negative effect on individuals
minds. Change noun form
individuals'
individual's
However
, others believe that the pros outweigh the cons. In my opinion
the right advertisement is the best way to promote a product. Add a comma
,opinion
This
essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of commercial
and provide a logical conclusion.
On the positive side, Fix the agreement mistake
commercials
advertisement
increases companies' income and helps to raise the economy. Replace the word
advertising
In other words
, competent advertising attracts new customers. Hence
, people
under the influence of advertising buy a product and involve new customers. To illustrate famous brand “Apple” spend a billion dollars in the case of promoting their
products. Their Correct pronoun usage
its
last
product iPhone 14 was promoted in
different platforms Change preposition
on
such
as YouTube, Instagram and on
billboards. Change preposition
apply
As a result
, the company’s sales and revenue increased. Another advantage is that it makes people
's lives comfortable. Obviously, in the 21st
Add a hyphen
21st-century
century
Add a comma
,century
people
get information
from phones. Commercial
is one of the sources of useful Add an article
The commercial
information
. For instance
, while surfing the web individuals can see information
about business courses, sign up for them and gain new knowledge.
But advertisement also
has some major disadvantages like advocacy of harmful substances like cigarettes and alcohol. First
of all, teenagers who have sensitive psyche
can succumb to propaganda. Fix the agreement mistake
psyches
Moreover
, it can cause problems with health. For example
, commercials on the packaging of cigarettes which
warn about health problems Correct pronoun usage
apply
it
can cause. But it cannot stop Correct pronoun usage
they
the
smokers. Another drawback is that not all sources of Correct article usage
apply
information
taken from advertisements can be true. Also
, there are a lot of fraud
and swindlers who want to deceive Fix the agreement mistake
frauds
people
and take their money. Namely, financial pyramids and bets. Individuals believe that they can easily earn money, but in fact
they become victims of fraud, and bad advertising.
In conclusion, Add a comma
,fact
although
commercial can have certain negative effects like fake information
or advocacy, it has an extremely positive effect on economy
and income. I believe that these benefits outweigh Correct article usage
the economy
its
drawbacks.Correct pronoun usage
their
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