Some people think that modern technology is making people more sociable, while others think it is making them less sociable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In the century of
technology
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gadgets have become an integral part of our lives. Some
people
believe that mobile phones and other
technology
make individuals more sociable, while others differ with it. In my
opinion
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electronic devices facilitate the process of socialization. Both opinions will be discussed in
this
essay.
To begin
with, using
technology
in some cases deteriorates
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interaction in real life.
Moreover
, individuals get addicted to these items, and spend
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amount
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of time in front of the screen
instead
of passing
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time with family or friends.
Furthermore
, with the advent of e-commerce and various other websites now
people
are able to buy commodities of daily need or pay their bills online.
As a result
,
this
has limited actual interactions among
people
.
For example
, Counterpoint Research company provided a study, according to the results of which 26% of
people
spend more than 7 hours on electronic devices.
However
, from my
perspective
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if the
technology
is used correctly, it will help to improve social life.
On the other hand
, electronic gadgets allow
people
to stay connected with each other. Obviously, communicating with is much easier than ever before.
Firstly
, thanks to various inventions, it is possible to communicate with an immeasurable number of
people
regardless of their geographical location.
Secondly
, in different applications or
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everyone can express emotions, discuss news, share pictures and even watch movies together online.
Hence
, it makes it possible to find like-minded individuals around the world without leaving home.
For instance
, one of the most popular
application
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in the world “
Twitter
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”, where you can find pages for
people
with different interests, as well as share your ideas and discuss news. In conclusion,
although
some
people
believe that modern phones have a negative impact on socialization, I consider that as long as
technology
is used carefully, its effects will be beneficial for socializing.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • online marketplaces
  • mobile payment options
  • personalized advertising
  • accessibility
  • compare prices
  • decision fatigue
  • impulse buying
  • financial imprudence
  • privacy and data security
  • transformed
  • streamlined
  • user-friendly
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