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You and some friends ate a meal at a restaurant to celebrate a special occasion, and you were very pleased with the food and service. Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter: Give details of your visit to the restaurant Explain the reason for the celebration Say what was good about the food and the service

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to thank you for the delicious food and wonderful service at your restaurant.
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 Saturday evening, I visited your restaurant with five members of my family. We stayed there for nearly two hours. The restaurant had a pleasant atmosphere , and the receptionist welcomed us politely and warmly. We were celebrating my wife's birthday
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, so we wanted to enjoy a special dinner together. It was an important and special occasion for me, and I wanted to have a nice meal with my family. The food was delicious and well-prepared. We especially like hotpot and chocolate cake. The portions were good , and everything was fresh.
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, the waiter was freindly and the service was excellent. Thank you once again for giving us
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 as memory experience. I look forward to visiting again soon. Yours faithfully,

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Give a little more detail about the meal. For example, say why the hotpot and cake were so good.
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Use the right words: “We especially liked the hotpot and chocolate cake.” Also write “a memorable experience,” not “such as memory experience.”
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are in a clear order. Add simple links such as “First,” “Also,” and “Finally” to make the letter flow even better.
coherence and cohesion
Check small marks and spaces: remove the space before a comma, and do not use a full stop after “birthday” before the comma.
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You answer all three parts: your visit, the birthday, and the food and service.
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The tone is polite and right for a letter to a restaurant manager.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear start, three main parts, and a good ending.
coherence and cohesion
Each main paragraph has one clear idea, so it is easy to read.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • outstanding
  • exquisite
  • impeccable
  • flawless
  • attentive
  • accommodating
  • courteous
  • prompt
  • delicious
  • mouthwatering
  • satisfying
  • memorable
  • thank
  • impressed
  • appreciate
  • grateful
  • recommend
  • celebration
  • occasional
  • special
  • occasion
  • stellar
  • exceptional
  • commend
  • commendable
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