Some people think that modern technology is making people more sociable, while others think it is making them less sociable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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technology
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people
more sociable, whereas others think it
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ng them less sociable. In my opinion, using
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makes
people
less sociable and my
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the following paragraphs. In
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21st
century it is not a secret that new technologies become part of our life and we are using them almost
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. Using them helps to communicate with friends,
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colleagues
or relatives whose
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in different
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without leaving home.
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it helps to make a friendship with strangers from all
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around
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number
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of applications that helps to text with others.
On the other hand
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of using computers, phones
people
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. The major problem is
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sticking
behind the phones leads to Internet addiction,
therefore
people
become less communicable.
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, they might have bad relationships with friends or parents. To illustrate, it has been shown that
people
aged 15~30 are most suffering from addiction to the Internet, because
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they offer
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of communication and health. To conclude, a breakthrough in
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sphere and
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number of technologies making our life easier
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in the past, but
people
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sides.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • online marketplaces
  • mobile payment options
  • personalized advertising
  • accessibility
  • compare prices
  • decision fatigue
  • impulse buying
  • financial imprudence
  • privacy and data security
  • transformed
  • streamlined
  • user-friendly
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