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More and more companies allow their employees to work from home or “remotely” rather than going into an office each day. Do the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages?

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Due to
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 various
circumstances
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 many huge corporations and smaller companies allow their
employees
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 to
work
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 remotely. In my opinion,
that is
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 way more comfortable than working from the office, since it creates a wide range of benefits for both employers and their workers. First of all, it definitely allows to spare precious time that
people
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 spend getting to
work
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 and going home afterwards. It is extremely convenient to wake up in the morning, take a shower, turn on your computer and get to
work
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 immediately without having to get stuck in a traffic jam or wait for a taxi during the rainy weather.
Secondly
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, recent studies show that introverts tend to manage
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their workload
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 in a more productive way
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 working alone. It obviously increases the quality of
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 performed on complex tasks which leads to a better performance
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.
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 but not least, employers get to spare a significant amount of money since there is no need to rent a huge space for the
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.
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, additional expenses
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 become irrelevant as there is no point in paying for electricity or hiring back office workers, like security or cleaners. It goes without saying that working from home
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 has its perks. The main disadvantage is that
people
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 need to socialize to create a friendly working atmosphere. Since live communication is no longer an option for the
employees
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, they tend to communicate online which may create a sense of solitude among
people
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. Especially it concerns newbies, as most newcomers have a hard time getting used to the new environment and it might be quite an obstacle to manage the tasks on their own without any live communication with the senior
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colleagues
.
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, some
people
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 find it convenient to communicate and learn during online meetings,
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, working remotely is pretty manageable for them.
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, working remotely was not an easy option, especially during the lockdown time.
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, nowadays it outweighs the option of working from the office since it offers a significant range of new opportunities for both employers and
employees
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.

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Ensure that each paragraph clearly links to the main thesis and that the ideas flow logically from one to another.
coherence and cohesion
In the introduction, clearly state that you will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages before presenting your opinion for more clarity.
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The essay addresses both sides of the argument clearly and provides a well-structured response to the prompt.
coherence and cohesion
There is a strong introduction and conclusion that encapsulate the main ideas effectively.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • telecommuting
  • remote working
  • work-life balance
  • productivity
  • distractions
  • flexible schedule
  • cost savings
  • office space
  • commuting
  • professional wardrobe
  • boundary
  • burnout
  • face-to-face interaction
  • teamwork
  • communication
  • isolation
  • workplace culture
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