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It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environment, such as the South Pole. What are advantages and disadvantages of this development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Undoubtedly, technology is developing day by day . So now it's possible for rainformers and visitors to travel to unsafe natural places ,
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 as the south pole . There are ample merits and demerits of
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 of ,technology the system has totally changed . Now visitors can easily travel to remote areas . So there are numerous pros to
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 . The major one is new findings .
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 , now individuals can easily go there and find new things .
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 , they get new experiences
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 . Because some people like to get ride of adventures .
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 , the shortage of shelter problem can be easily solved .
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 , it's getting a positive effect on the environment because in the cutting-edge era of the increasing population global warming is
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 , with the merits as far as some disadvantages
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 . The
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 types of places people need a high amount of funds.
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 , they need to carry more clothes, jackets and some other winter clothes. So these are very expensive .
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 , it makes causes death . Because there the temperature is very freezy . So some people can't able to survive there. To sum up , according to me both are
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 . But it is a negative trend because it is the cause of death . Lawmakers should contrive new rules to make place for better live

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remote natural environment
  • scientific research
  • climate change
  • wildlife
  • natural phenomena
  • disruption
  • ecosystems
  • pollution
  • habitat destruction
  • carbon footprint
  • logistics
  • global warming
  • ethical concern
  • curiosity
  • preservation
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