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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some people think that there are currently excessive alternatives. I strongly agree with
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 statement because advancements in technology allow
manufacturers
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 to produce more
products
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 and the presence of online shopping increases choices' visibility.
Due to
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 a significant improvement in technology,
manufacturers
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 can lower their production costs and
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 results in more choices of
products
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. Robotics and AI play a crucial role in production lines because they allow factories to produce unlimited
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products
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 patterns easily through software,
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 with human workers who require time and investment to learn new skills. It
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 saves time and money on the production and
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 allows
manufacturers
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 to produce more product varieties regardless
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 any concerns.
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, GQ, a fashion company, provides 18 different sizes of pants for their consumers to satisfy them effectively. Online shopping
platforms
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 are the other factor fostering an increase in options. Product owners can show their
products
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 at a lower listing fee because they are not required for any payment for presenting their goods at physical stores. Small shops
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 have more opportunities to sell their merchandise than dealing with large retailers so
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customers can find more options on the
platforms
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.
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, Amazon charges companies at much lower rates than Tesco does, encouraging the companies to sell and list their
products
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 on the platform.
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, the lower the fee charged, the more product options are presented on the
platforms
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. In conclusion, people nowadays have too many alternatives because
manufacturers
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 are capable of producing more
products
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 by adapting technology.
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, online shopping
platforms
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 are another factor in increasing the number of
products
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 presented.

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task achievement
Consider elaborating on your main points to provide a deeper understanding of your arguments. For example, you could include additional examples or evidence to support the claim about technology and online shopping.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clarify some connections between your points in the conclusion. Instead of just repeating the main ideas, you might summarize why these factors lead to a perception of excessive choices.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, making it easy to follow.
task achievement
The use of specific examples, such as GQ and Amazon, helps to strengthen your arguments.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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