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There are a lot of cases in our
life
 when
people
 who failed at school became really
successfulin
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successful in
 their adulthood. Some
people
 believe, that it's just random, but other
people
 including me don'
t
 agree. I can understand the
first
 group. Because your
marks
 often can show your knowledge and your chances in
life
. If you get good
marks
 you can go to a good university. And, usually, that means that you will become an educated and rich person. The
second
 group doesn'
t
 agree. They are sure, that
marks
 aren'
t
 really important for your adulthood. There are a lot of examples of when a person without a good education becomes rich and succeeds in
life
. Sometimes they have rich parents or special talents, but, usually, they just want to achieve more in their lives. And I think that it's more important. But we don'
t
 hear about
people
, who have achieved nothing because they are not famous. There are a lot of clever
people
 which would have preferred to become successful but haven'
t
. And
that is
 why in my opinion you need to be really lucky to become successful without working. But most
people
 aren'
t
 so lucky. At the same
time
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 I'm sure that you don'
t
 have to understand all your school subjects to become successful.
Usually
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,Usually
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 you need to choose your own area, where you feel comfortable and interested. Overall, it's really difficult to become a successful person, and, usually, it's tied only
with
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to
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 your luck and your talents. So, I'm sure that
marks
 aren'
t
 so important for your adult
life
.
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