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İmmigration has a major impact on the society. What are the main reasons of immigrations? To what consequenced can it lead?

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immigration
 is one of the most popular international
movement
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 in human
life
. It has affected
on
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society from
the
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ancient time. There are many
reasons
 for immigrants to leave their
hometown
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. In
this
essay
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 I will talk about these
reasons
 and explain the consequences that
immigration
lead
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to
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. There are various
reasons
 which lead to
immigration
. War is the maintain
reason
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 for
immigration
. Despite modern
life
 challenges
are
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 far from military conflict between governments, There are some countries that have faced
to
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it. So, People of these countries have to leave their
hometown
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hometowns
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 and move to another
country
 to survive. In
this
 term, We call them
refugee
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 and government authorities should support them
with
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 launching refugee assistance organizations. The other
reasons
 for immigrants are
persuing
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 higher education and boosting their skills in their job field. These are
most
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 popular
reasons
 for
immigration
 among
youth
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the youth
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 generation.
However
, the qualification that
embassy
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 of each
country
 needs
are
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 not easy for everyone. The government filtered them wisely and choose these people carefully to let them into their
country
 and if they accepted, Their whole
life
 may change. They can improve their personal and work
life
 in that
country
 and
then
 back to their hometown to help peers in their
career
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. To sum up,
Immigration
 is an international movement and it has huge impacts on society and people. The
reasons
of
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 it are so different and most of the time the consequences of
this
 movement are positive and lead to
happy
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a happy
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life
 for immigrants.
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