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Social media has replaced the traditional methods of communicating and people use more and more social media in communicating and to follow news and events. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your opinion with an example.

#media #methods #people #news #events
Technology has made the lifestyle of human beings convenient
from
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 the past decades .owing to
this
,many individuals opine that nowadays
poeple
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people
 prefer to spend time on social
media
 to interact with friends as well as acquire the news. As I believe that
the
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 are so many merits and demerits of
online
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platform
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platforms
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 which will be articulated in the upcoming paragraphs . Undeniably, there are multifarious
benifits
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benefits
 of social
media
.
The
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first
 and foremost is that it is
feasible
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 way to contact
with
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a friend
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friend
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friends
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 who
live
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to
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the
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another
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 other nation not only
this
 but
also
 it is
cost effective
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 as people can easily call face to face.
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Apert
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 from
this
,through online
platform
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platforms
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people
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 can know about the happenings all around the world in a few
second
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seconds
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 on their electronic gadgets as well as during travelling time they can watch live news and other important things
Nevertheless
,the downside of social
media
 which cannot be overlooked is that the love strength among
the
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individual reduce as they only talk on social
media
 for their requirements as well as there are fake news which
are
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 revealed on social
media
 without any identification
as a result
 many citizens acquire some wrong information In conclusion,
although
 social
media
 is
good
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 platform in
this
 era
but
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i
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 believe that it reduces the bond strength among
the
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people.
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