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Some people feel that with the rise of artificial intelligence, computers and robots will take over the roles of teachers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #rise #intelligence #computers #robots #roles #teachers
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modern
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 age, we can observe
an immense advances
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 in
technology
.
Hence
, it is commonly considered by some individuals that electronic brains will dominate
over
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the roles of educators.
However
, despite some alters I believe that artificial intelligence will never become a substitution for human interactivity. In the following essay, I am going to assert the reasons for my point of view.
To begin
 with, there is no doubt that
technology
 is playing a key role in most aspects of our lives. As it is known, artificial machines are
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 in some fields
such
 as medicine, food, car industries and so on.
Moreover
, there
have
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 been indicated
a
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huge progress
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 in teaching purposes. It is undeniable fact that cutting-edge
technology
 enables us to acquire a wealth of information and stay up to date. As an illustration of
this
, we can feature online classes which help us improve our knowledge.
On the other hand
, despite some successful achievements in using electronic devices, computers and robots will never be replaced
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 educators. As, no matter how sophisticated these gadgets are, they are unable to find out the weaknesses of their students and improve their knowledge.
Furthermore
,
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one research it puts that: in 2020 during
Covid
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 pandemic
robost
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robots
robust
 were tested in nursing homes in order to serve
elder
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ones
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.
However
, the result was not as effective as human service. In conclusion,
Although
 there have been
the
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huge progress in
technology
 and no matter how capable artificial intelligence is, computers as well as robots will never become a successful substitution for human interaction.
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