Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Some
people
would argue that
problems
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with ecology should be solved on a global scale, while
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that is
better to solve them locally. While
,
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solving environmental
issues
locally is
great
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and appropriate solution, I believe that
problems
connected with ecology should be solved worldwide. On the one hand, solving
problem
on a national scale is the best way with solving local environmental
issues
. It means that local citizens which live around the territory already know
ecological
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issues
.
Hence
, they already know which measures should be taken in order to solve
this
problem
.
Moreover
, when
problem
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is  being solved locally all the national
people
want to contribute to
this
.
For example
, in Israel  state
departament
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department
of ecology is divided
to
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4 local
departament
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department
which leads to quick
solution
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solutions
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However
, I believe that
this
method doesn't solve the actual
problem
, because it can
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again.
On the other hand
, solving ecological
issues
worldwide
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to stop developing and even close
this
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problems
. All
people
would take part in solving
this
problem
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finding out the main trigger and
people
among
whole
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planet would qualifier
problem solving
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. As an example, the most popular ecological company named "Eco-green" has solved the garbage
problem
globally by only taking part
all
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humanity on
the
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Earth. I consider that
this
method is preferable because it leads to total solving
problem
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. In conclusion, while solving ecological
problems
is quick by knowing all ecological
issues
,
i
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think that solving
this kind
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of
problems
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globally leads to better
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of work.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international cooperation
  • sovereign rights
  • Paris Agreement
  • climate change
  • ocean pollution
  • collective measures
  • economic interests
  • political will
  • enforcement issues
  • free-riders
  • tailor-made solutions
  • transboundary pollution
  • resource constraints
  • global frameworks
  • national efforts
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