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many students take partime jobs while studying in university , you think it’s a good idea or bad idea.

#students #partime #jobs #university #it’s #idea
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Working part-time while you are studying is a subject of debate . A few folks argue that working part-time as a student is a good idea so that student can
fund
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studies
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 few people think it's not the right choice to make as
students
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' precious time is wasted doing menial
jobs
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. Let's discuss both points of view and
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 I will give my opinion .
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 ,Working part-time and earning money so that student can
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 their
studies
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 is a good way of funding
studies
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. As higher education is a costly affair and Many
students
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 rely on part-time
jobs
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 to
fund
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 their educational programs for postgraduate and graduate degrees. ,
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,Part times can be not as promising as it sounds to be . For ,instance In North American countries like US & Canada
students
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 are allowed to work part-time on weekly basis.
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 arrangement is done so that they can
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 their
studies
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 in US or Canada.
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, Earning while studying and doing menial
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 can be a deal breaker for
students
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 . As they lost a considerable amount of time doing part-time
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. Whereas they won't be able to Concentrate on their educational program.
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 ,
students
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 in the UK have to do menial
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 like cashiers, waiters, babysitters or gas station employees.
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 kind of job doesn't provide valuable corporate experience. In conclusion , I am of opinion that most
students
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 won't get benefitted from doing part-time
jobs
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 and wasting their valuable time studying and doing menial
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.Part-time
jobs
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 can prove value addition if they are offered in the same field of education
students
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 are pursuing.
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