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In many countries today, both men and women need to work full time. Therefore, some people think men and women should share household takes equally (eg. cleaning and looking after children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today's world, equality between
men
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 and
women
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 has become one of the most concerning issues and both
men
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 and
women
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 work full-time. Some individuals claim that household takes should be shared equally between
men
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 and
women
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. I completely agree with
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 statement and in
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 essay, I will discuss the relevant reasons behind
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 issue.
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 with,
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's lifestyles have changed a lot due to various reasons. In the past, merely
men
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 worked full-time and were responsible for family expenses.
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,
women
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 spent all the time in the
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 and did
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 works,
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 as cleaning and taking care of offspring. In
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 contemporary era, with the development of technology and an increase in expenses, both
men
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 and
women
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 require to work full-time.
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, they spend the same time in the
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 and should share household takes equally, as their responsibility for expenses is the same.
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, another reason is the development in
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's minds. To be more precise, in the past,
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 used to believe having a job and earning money are a male's responsibility.
On the other hand
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, it was a female's duty to do all the
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 works and take care of the children. Today,
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's personalities and visions of life have changed in different ways.
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, the differences between the two genders have reduced and there is more equality between a male and a female. So, all life aspects should be shared equally. To sum up, due to changes in lifestyles and personalities,
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 and
women
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 work full time.
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 some
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 think housing works are
women
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's duty, both
men
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 and
women
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 are responsible for household takes, and everything should be shared equally.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dual incomes
  • distribution of household chores
  • evolving societal norms
  • gender roles
  • mutual respect
  • quality time
  • life satisfaction
  • cultural contexts
  • traditional beliefs
  • inefficiencies
  • discontent
  • open communication
  • negotiate chores
  • pragmatic approach
  • harmonious
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