Many small, local shops are closing as they are unable to compete with large supermarkets in the area. How does this affect local communities? How could this situation be improved?

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There is no doubt in saying that large shopping centres have somehow overtaken the business of small, local shops in their respective local

markets

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. Not only local communities are being negatively affected due inefficiency of the local market to stay in competition with major shopping centres but it is

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also disadvantageous

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for the income generation of vendors involved in

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business.

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my perception, for the benefit of local shops and ,communities it is essential to

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the quality of goods, and other items which are being sold by the local vendors to engage customer retention. It is quite obvious that the shutdown of the local and small department stores has created quite a hassle for localities, as just to buy daily necessities like dairy products, fruits and vegetables or bakery items one has to go to a supermarket which is usually not in the nearby vicinity of the locality.

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items are usually perishable in nature

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expiry dates so can not be stored as well. At the same ,time local outlets are most often owned by people living in a particular area and emerging large flea

markets

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are highly affecting the livelihood of

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shop owners.

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, supermarket chains like Reliance

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or Big

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are taking away the customer base of neighbourhood stores and certainly creating a huge loss for their business.

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, society and local businesses both are affected negatively. I believe,

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that sustaining

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the local

markets

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needs to be supported by the government authorities by initiating the policy of subsidizing the basic daily use commodities. Of course, imposing

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measures will assuredly discourage bigger mart from having a monopoly by using their own price tags and discounts.

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is going to provide a lucrative opportunity for local vendors to be in the trade and expand the customer base simultaneously.

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, chances of elimination of small shops by large

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will be a less likely situation to face.

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although

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the growing popularity of shopping centre cannot be denied

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the distinctive features that it provides ,

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, the local outlet is still essential for society.

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The essay addresses the prompt and provides some relevant ideas but lacks development and depth in the response.

coherence and cohesion

The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, but the ideas are not consistently organized throughout the essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

353 words

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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