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People today are spending more and more time outside of the home. What are the reasons for this trend? What effects is it having on individuals and society?

#people #time #home #trend #effects #individuals #society
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 to
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people
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outside
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multiple
 factors that lead to
this
 trend which has made
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 on not only
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individuals
 but
also
 our society. The change of
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working
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environment
 is one of the aspects worth to be mentioned. In the previous century,
people
 own their only lands,
thus
 they are able to plant vegetables and raise
cattles
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cattle
 for their own supplies at home,
however
, now the majority of
people
 work for establishments which usually require the employee to attend to
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company
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Additionally
, the development of public transportation in comparison to the old days provides more convenience to travel
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 motivates
people
 to go out.
As a result
 of
this
 trend,
people
 today may have less sense of belonging to
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their
the
 home, and
this
 may cause unstable
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 between family members.
The
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 are studies indicating that the
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divorce
 rate today is significantly
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 than
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 past decades.
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