It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

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ordinary life during
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few years,
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there has been a debate for
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necessary to take
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of
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in our social and individual life or not. I admit, there is
also
a pressing need for it in every segment of our life
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, I am
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a huge
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fan of taking
risks
and in
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I will discuss both
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.
Firstly
, taking
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risk
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means making a decision with
an unclear consequences
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unclear consequences
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, which
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may fear and lead us to
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more
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choices,
although
it may reduce our chance
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having a good result as well.
for instance
, working in higher positions
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standing against higher pressure and making risky choices which
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can lead that person to
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as a result
. For a clear example, a manager has
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salary than a regular employer which
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achieved by putting himself in more risky situations.
Additionally
, people can improve themselves when they create
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situation
as
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taking
risks
, in another word, when a person
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to be a leader without having leadership skill
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or experience
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will gage new skills in
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term.
On the other hand
,
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major has its own drawbacks too. It might be different for each person, but in research
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people mostly lost something important, including their family relationships or particularly money. The obvious disadvantage of taking
risk
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is
failure
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. To conclude, I believe, the advantages of taking
risks
outweigh the disadvantages in total. In another word,
risks
are effective tools which it can improve
humans
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abilities whether social or personal.
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it is beneficial to accept new opportunities but
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after drawbacks at the same time. consequences
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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