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Some people believe that schoolchildren should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Most of society advocates that giving
homework
 to
students
 of all ages is a crucial part of improving and making coherent their academic knowledge studied in
school
.
In contrast
, some people argue that pupils in their early ages drown in the massive assignment which makes their offspring more stressed. From my perspective, personally, I believe that giving
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duty to scholars is not an essential part of academic learning anymore. In order to prove my opinion,
this
 essay will discuss both sides.
To begin
 with, there is a great example, which is Japan, of not giving
homework
 to
students
 at their early stages of
school
, especially adolescents. Considering the Japanese educational system, Teachers do not give a single chore to
students
 during grade
school
.
Instead
 of pressuring the children with chores or complicated annoying subjects, they try to teach them how to complete tasks in real life by their own decisions and
also
 practice group projects which is useful for real life. According to a study published by the Japanese government, after abolishing mandatory
homework
, children's happiness increased, and
also
 their results showed that high
school
students
 who did not receive
homework
 in their elementary
school
 performed higher than those who constantly did practice at the early age of
school
 in final exams.
On the other hand
,
For example
, doing a sufficient amount of
homework
 daily is beneficial to learn subjects in long term. From my own experience, to memorize or expertise in some kind of special field, the frequency of doing tasks related to the subject is necessary
also
 it is the most effective way to learn.
However
, forcing children to do complicated
homework
 can make decrement in their eagerness to study again. Once they exceeded the limit, their enthusiasm never became the same as at the beginning which might cause catastrophic results in high
school
 and even their adulthood. In conclusion, the main purpose of
homework
 is to help
students
 to expertise on what they learned in
school
.
However
, giving and forcing them to do an excessive amount of appointments may result in lower interest in the academic subject in high
school
 period.
Therefore
, modern educational systems should stop giving
homework
 to
students
 who are young enough to learn later urgently.
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