Many people like to wear fashionable clothes. While others think it is a waste of money. What is your opinion on this?

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buy
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for buying a laptop to support their studies
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in the world and has a positive impact to boost their
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some people who do not buy a lot of cloth usually use their
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to support their studies.
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