Some people believe that schools should only teach children subjects which are beneficial to their future careers and therefore other subjects such as music and sports are not important. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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are important in children's well-being. Some people argue that schools should only teach academic

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which are more beneficial than other

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music

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and leisure activities; others, while, opposite approach. I completely disagree with

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claim and revel others view points in forthcoming paragraphs and give an appropriate response to

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essay. In my experience: all

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are vital for school going children's and their future lives

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. To be more specific, studying variety of

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in school gives opportunities to make career in different fields.

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, studying only academic

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lead boring lives, yet studying

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and playing

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give them relef from academic strees.

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: in a recent article describe how important is studying

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and

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with other

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and give a better result in their academic performance.

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adding these

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work as not only stress buster but

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career option as well.

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view, other,

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, think only focus on benifical

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as math, science and computer programming which is better option for career rather than

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industry or

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field, because of high income packages are provided by big multinational companies, which attract millions of people. These

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have more benefits in overseas markets; development in computer science all over the globe.

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these

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assist them for fulfilling all desire in their life. In conclusion,

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every subject is important for well-being of students, but due to increasing demands academic

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have dominant role in the curriculum; but do not overlook

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and

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benefits.

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Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 9.0

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