you bought tv a week ago but when you got home you discovered that

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Dear Mr
jackson
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Jackson
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, The reason I am writing to you is
poor
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the poor
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quality of your commodity,
Unfortunately
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,Unfortunately
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the TV which I bought from your company
is does
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does
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not
working
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work
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well , when
i
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I
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connected the tv to wifi it started to work badly after that I tried
connected
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with your company
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the dispatcher
in the beginning
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ignored me
then
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I called again and the other dispatcher served me and she said that your company can not help me with that . The ideal solution would be
change
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to change
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this
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TV to
other
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another
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I hope you will help me with it I look forward to hearing from you . Maga Zakirov
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