SOME PEOPLE PREFER RURAL LİFE AND THE OTHERS PREFER LIVING IN THE CITIES.WHAT DO YOU THINK ABOUT THEIR PREFERENCES.WHAT ARE THE ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES ABOUT THIS SITUATION

Globally,
majority
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the majority
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of
people
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think that
rural
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the rural
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environment is for the poor and there lesser
opportunities
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there and that the urban area it's for the rich and many
opportunities
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and
decoveries
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discoveries
can be found there. Personally, I think it
better
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is better
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to live in the
cities
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than
villages
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in villages
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.
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essay will be discussing the merits and demerits of
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issue.
Firstly
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, there is
saying
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a saying
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that
life
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in the
village
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is for relaxation. The occupants in the
village
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has
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have
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some advantages which
includes
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include
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,
peaceful
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a peaceful
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environment, less pollution, reduce criminal activities etc.
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However
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there are
also
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some disadvantages of living in the
village
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which
includes
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include
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, limited
opportunities
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, inability to explore different ideas and reduce exposure. Meanwhile, despite the cons,
people
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still prefer situating in
the
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apply
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rural areas
especially
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,especially
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at
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in
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old age.
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, my uncle when he was
at
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in
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his
20's
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,
he
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apply
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decided to leave his home town to the
cities
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to find himself and explore, reaching the
cities
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he
then
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decided to open a business which later made him rich and made
investment
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investments
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for his retirement.
At
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In
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his late
60's
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60s
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he decided to retire and return to
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village
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the village
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, where he rested and have reflections
about
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on
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his
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life time
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lifetime
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achievement.
On the other hand
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,
life
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in the
cities
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is not as rosy as it seems, even though they are greater
opportunities
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, good connections, better light, water and electricity, there are
also
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some cons
such
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as road traffic accidents, increased air and noise pollution, expensive lifestyle etc but
people
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still prefer the
life
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there because there are high chances of them getting their dream job and achieving their goal by becoming successful. In summary, I am of the opinion that
people
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should live in
urban
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an urban
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environment rather than
rural
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a rural
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setting because they can be able to explore the world and face different
life
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challenges which will make them become
the
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a
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better version of themselves.

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