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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Face-to-face communication is better than other types of communication such as emails, text massages or telephone calls. Give your opinion and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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All kinds of connections are important since humans are social beings and need to socialize, but in
this
 essay, I will explain why I agree that personal interaction is better than other forms of interaction
while
 giving examples that I believe are relevant.
Firstly
, I have to acknowledge that speaking through media devices
such
 as the mobile phone or the computer is great for times when people are apart from one another and is the only way of communication.
For example
, I lived in Belgium for 3 months and my parents and friends did not have the possibility of visiting me, so we made video calls which made me feel closer to them and keep updated about their lives. The problem is that it does not allow the incorporation of physical touch which, in my opinion, is very important, mainly because of my culture.
For instance
, in Portugal, we introduce ourselves with kisses on the cheek or handshakes, and we give a lot of hugs, so in the example that I gave previously, during the video calls, I would miss the touch of my family members and friends.
Secondly
, face-to-face communication is the natural way for humans to interact. Technology only started to develop a few decades ago and people had to adapt to it, but it is still not intrinsic to our nature and many individuals, mainly older adults, do not know how to use their mobile phones.
For example
, my grandfather does not understand how to accept my calls, and when a problem
rises
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, like the sound not coming out of the speakers, he does not know how to resolve it. In conclusion, even though conversation through emails or telephone calls is an amazing option when personal contact is not possible, in my opinion,
this
last
 one will always be the best way of connection, because it involves physical caring and is an innate form of communication.
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task response
Your essay demonstrates a clear understanding of the topic and presents a well-developed argument. Ensure that your examples are relevant and directly support your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay is well-structured, with clear introduction and conclusion. Ensure that your ideas are organized in a logical sequence throughout the essay.
lexical resource
You have used a good range of vocabulary and expressions to express your ideas. Make sure to use a variety of sentence structures and vocabulary to enhance lexical resource.
grammatical range
Your grammar and sentence structures are mostly accurate, but be attentive to punctuation and sentence complexity to demonstrate a more advanced range.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Facilitates
  • Emotional connection
  • Convey
  • Interpret
  • Facial expressions
  • Body language
  • Tone of voice
  • Enhances
  • Clarity
  • Misunderstandings
  • Interpretation
  • Visual and auditory cues
  • Encourages
  • Active engagement
  • Focused attention
  • Builds
  • Trust
  • Rapport
  • Personal and professional relationships
  • Fosters
  • Immediate feedback
  • Clarification
  • Decision-making
  • Problem-solving
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