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You and your family are living in rented accommodation in an English-speaking country. You are not satisfied with the condition of some of the furniture. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter introduce yourself explain what is wrong with the furniture say what action you would like the landlord to take

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Dear Adam, Hope
this
 letter finds you in good health. I am Navneet Kaur, I live in unit 40 at Kimberly Lane. I moved into
this
 apartment with my family in the month of March and signed the lease agreement with you a week before that. I am writing
this
 letter to you to express my concern about the faulty furniture in my rented house. The dining table seems to be relentlessly old as it even has two broken chairs,
furthermore
, the sofa cover in the lobby needs an immediate wash as well. When I was moving in you promised to fix them but it's been four months now nothing has been done yet. I request to change the dining table set
along with
 providing a wash for the soda cover as soon as possible because the sofa seems immensely unhygienic and I don’t want my kids to feel sick. I am home
this
 weekend, if you want to come finish the job that would be great. I will be waiting for your reply. Yours sincerely, Navneet Kaur.
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suitable writing tone
Consider maintaining a consistent and slightly more formal tone throughout the letter. While the overall tone is polite, certain phrases could be adjusted to maintain professionalism.
complete response
The letter could benefit from a more explicit introduction that clearly states its purpose right from the beginning. This helps in ensuring complete clarity.
logical structure
The letter is well-organized with clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of the issue.
greeting and closing
The closing of the letter is polite and expresses eagerness for a resolution, which is very suitable for this type of correspondence.
complete response
The explanation of the issues with the furniture is detailed and provides a clear picture of the problems.
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