Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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come across with many selfish or

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people

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if their members had taken freely

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about their routine issues when they were

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.

However

, others appreciate having the right of choice for every human

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can help them to be more independent, I believe that being an effective person for

society

is more important than

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. Human right is chief among concerns for those who think

children

must be avoided from many

decisions

. They believe that if we allow

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immature individuals to make every choice that they like, it would

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in some immoral behaviours which could be fixed in their personalities, resulting in a

society

full of anxiety or violence.

Furthermore

, we need to take into account how some snap

decisions

could be harmful

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our

children

.

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, using drugs or some unhealthy foods

such

as fast foods could

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to many mental or physical disorders like heart diseases.

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, there are many people who have a different view about taking

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children

. They think that in the ever-expanding globalization, we could not limit

children

due to it is their natural right to make a

decision

about themselves. They

also

believe that it is the only way that

society

could embrace many independent people.

Although

it could help

children

to practice independency, I do believe some

decisions

generate some useless features which could be

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for every community. In conclusion, while some benefits can be considered for

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freely

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which

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by

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, in order to safety matters and

society

benefits, I think

children

should be away from making many dangerous

decisions

.