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Some people believe that global warming is today’s most pressing environmental problem. At the same time, some consider deforestation to have the most devastating impact on the world. Discuss both views and give your opinion on the same. You should write at least 250 words for this task.

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With the dawn of industrialisation and urbanisation, our environment has changed drastically, and mostly for the worst. After witnessing the utter chaos on a global scale brought to life by alarming consequences of climate change like ozone layer depletion, forest fires, and global warming, people have narrowed down the causes to two very serious environmental problems: global warming and deforestation. The question of which one has a more severe impact on our world has been the topic of discussion in recent decades. Global warming has given rise to a myriad of issues like rising temperature and worsening air and water quality, which have long-lasting ramifications for
this
 planet’s inhabitants.
For instance
, surging sea levels in cities situated on river banks have been a piece of alarming news that has prompted various governments to act on it.
Additionally
, the state of coral reefs in parts of Australia and other countries has
also
 gained global attention. Overall, the consequences of global warming are threatening the wide gamut of species existing on our planet. Deforestation has
also
 caused a multitude of environmental issues like frequent flooding due to the soil going loose owing to a depleting forest cover, loss of indigenous species, droughts, and more. A good example of
this
 is the rising levels of pollution in overly industrialised countries which is a direct implication of fewer forests. Conclusively, it is impossible to pick one out of the two – deforestation and global warming – and
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claim it as the more serious problem because both have worked in tandem to increase environmental concerns.
Therefore
, we have to direct our efforts in the direction that curbs the effect of both issues equally and significantly if we don’t want to find ourselves on the brink of extinction in the near future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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