These days many people leave their country to work abroad and take their family with them. Do you think benefits of this outweigh disadvantages in terms of family development?

Nowadays, many people leave their homeland to work in a foreign
country
and take their family members with them. In my opinion, going to a different
country
has more benefits than disadvantages.
This
essay will mostly examine the advantages of moving to work abroad and provide a logical conclusion. The two main advantages of working abroad are earning more salary and better education for children.
Firstly
, when people go to a foreign land to work, most of them earn more salary compared to their own
country
. Mostly, experienced professionals are invited by employers to their companies from different countries, so they earn more than locals.
Secondly
, because
expats
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have
high
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income
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, they are able to provide better living conditions
to
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their
family
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.
For instance
, most of the expats' family members live better than their nationals.
However
, moving to another
country
and working there has some disadvantages like
loosing
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connections with friends and relatives and assimilation difficulties. When people
leaves
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their homeland, they
also
leave their close friends and lovely relatives. As time passes, their connection
also
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looses
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. They start to get in touch less and
as a result
, they are becoming strangers to each other.
Moreover
,
expats
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usually face assimilation hardships when they arrive in a new place. It takes some amount of time to get accustomed to the
country
they moved to. In my opinion,
good
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sides
outweigh the bad
sides
of moving to another nation. To conclude,
although
migrating to another
country
for working purposes has disadvantages like assimilation issues and
loosing
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connections with their close, it has
an
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extremely positive
impacts
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such
as earning more
salary
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and better living conditions for their family members. I believe that the good
sides
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outweighs
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the bad
sides
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of moving to another nation. '
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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