some people say that computer game are bad for children by all means; others believe that these games are contributing to children's development discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Computer
Add an article
The computer
show examples
game
has been a
favorite
Change the spelling
favourite
show examples
pastime for
children
around the world for decades.
However
, parents and teachers are still debating on the effect of
Add an article
the game
show examples
game
Fix the agreement mistake
games
show examples
to
Change preposition
on
show examples
the young generation. Some believe that it’s all bad, but some
believes
Change the verb form
believe
show examples
in its potential to accelerate
children
’s development.
This
essay will explain both views including my stance on why gaming is overall bad for kids. Nowadays,
video
Add an article
the video
a video
show examples
game
is one of the cheapest and most sought-after
children
’s hobby. Through that, they can socialize and even make new friends.
This
has been the case with online
game
Fix the agreement mistake
games
show examples
, both
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
console
Fix the agreement mistake
consoles
show examples
, PC,
or
Correct word choice
and
show examples
even mobile phones. Some of the more competitive ones even
increasing
Wrong verb form
increase
show examples
their hand-eye coordination and teamwork skills.
On the other hand
, sandbox and story-heavy games could spark their creativity and imagination. So it’s wrong to say that
game
is bad by all means. In fact, it has many benefits for
children
of all
age
Fix the agreement mistake
ages
show examples
.
However
, just like the positive
effects
, gaming
also
have
Change the verb form
has
show examples
many negative
effects
. Unfortunately, the negative
effects
could completely negate the positive
effects
one could gain from playing
video
game
Fix the agreement mistake
games
show examples
.
For example
, the competitive nature of
online
Add an article
the online
show examples
game
Fix the agreement mistake
games
show examples
could lead to toxic behaviour
such
as swearing and racism. Other than that, the diverse online community could
also
make
children
influenced by older players’ impoliteness. One of the most dangerous effect
video
game
has is addiction.
This
would make its player unwittingly spend hours and hours playing
everyday
Replace the word
every day
show examples
just to unlock a new item or character.
Therefore
,
children
are prone to these
effects
if left unguided.
Video
Add an article
The video
A video
show examples
game
is technically not bad per se. Rather, there are many titles that give different experiences for
different
Add an article
a different
show examples
audience
Fix the agreement mistake
audiences
show examples
. But with the most popular
game
played by
children
have
Wrong verb form
having
show examples
all these terrible
effects
, it is safer to keep
childrens
Correct your spelling
children
show examples
away from playing
video
game
Fix the agreement mistake
games
show examples
and just do other exciting
activity
Fix the agreement mistake
activities
show examples
instead
.
Submitted by ftm.zahroh on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
Topic Vocabulary:
  • detrimental
  • sedentary behavior
  • obesity
  • hinder
  • cognitive skills
  • problem-solving
  • decision-making
  • spatial awareness
  • engaging learning environment
  • motivates
  • foster
  • teamwork
  • collaborate
  • mitigating potential risks
  • parental guidance
  • physically interactive
What to do next:
Look at other essays: