Do you think it is important for children to be taught art?

It is often said that teaching
art
to
children
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essential . I strongly believed
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totally true because of several reasons. One of the most important
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which is mostly standing out is creativity get encouraged . I mean that knowing more about
art
can lead to
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other aspect
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of everything since
art
is full of
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,
children
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and children
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can have
own
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their own
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feeling
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about different things.
for
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a  painting by Salvador Dali about the time that we wait for someone or something can be expressed by a painting full of different types of
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which are melting . Before he painted
this
great painting, people hadn't thought like that. Another reason which
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that
art
plays an important role in
children
's
life
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is that
art
and crafts can benefit
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several ways. As
children
's brains are constantly learning and growing , it is important to provide them with activities which will help stimulate
this
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this
growth, making future learning more enjoyable and
achiveable
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achievable
.
Art
supplies offer a wide variety of opportunities for
children
to learn and grow , including developing their language skills , improving dimensional thinking , helping them learn
diffrent
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different
shapes and colours , and teaching them how to be
patiant
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patient
and
presistent
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persistent
present
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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