Many children have become habitual about excessively using mobile application day and night. Why do you think this is so ? What parents can do to avoid this situation declining further ?

The rapid development of technology has dramatically changed our
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standard
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while abusing
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among children has
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number of parents. There are several
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factors
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to
this
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phenomenon
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time parents concerned took proper steps to stop
this
trend.
To begin
with, it is undeniable that children have
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abilities of
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compared to adults, which means that they are more likely to be attracted by the diversity of
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that mobile
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applications
can deliver.
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reading
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books
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,
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the smartphone
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smartphone
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smartphones
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can usually present
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information in
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interactive and
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efficient
method.
Furthermore
, using mobile is handy since nearly everyone carries a smartphone in
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pocket and they can just pull it out anytime when they want
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as result,
this
behaviour has become habitual.
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phenomenon
definitely
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detriment
detrimental
to the growth of
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and parent should control
this
trend by
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the hours of cellphone usage. The majority of smartphones have a feature called parent mode. By setting up
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mobile
on
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smart devices,
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a parent
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parent
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parents
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can easily limit the time of
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. Parents can
also
shut down the
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accessibilities
access abilities
of
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selected applications
such
as
tiktok
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TikTok
, youtube or
netflix
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that could attract children's attention. In conclusion, the
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of using smart devices is
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absolutely
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detrimental
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of teenagers. Hopefully,
this
trend would be eliminated in the near future by
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practising
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former
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