All over the world, children in societies are facing a growing problem with obesity. What are the reasons for this rise in obesity? How could it be tackled?

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are the backbone of the country. It is pity that teenagers nowadays encounter an increasing problem with being overweight. I will discuss the cause of

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growth in obesity and how to minimise

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issue in my upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, I would like to say one reason for the increasing fat body percentage among

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is the consumption of fast foods. In spite of these foods having very low nutritional value and being made from unhealthy oils, they are very tempting to taste buds ,

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end up eating them more and become the victim of emotional hunger. The unhealthy fat in the snacks makes

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put up a lot of weight

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, they become lethargic. There was recent news that popped up on international media news channels stating that all

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adults in the U.S.A are consuming ninety per cent of their diet which is not a part of the Balanced diet.

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, they have become couch potatoes because of consuming unhealthy food. To eradicate

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problem, Parents and school teachers should join hands and come together to reduce the bad consequences of obesity that are affecting

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's lives. Parents should be creative in developing new food recipes for their

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that are not only tasty but

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contain essential vitamins which are necessary for the good health of a child.

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, there should be a period related to physical and mental health made compulsory for students to attend which will keep them in shape. To conclude, the heir is the future of any country. It's the duty of adults to make them aware of healthy eating habits

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as the difference between emotional and physical hunger. Healthy

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are a vital asset for his country.

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Grammatical Range: 8.0

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All over the world, children in societies are facing a growing problem with obesity. What are the reasons for this rise in obesity? How could it be tackled?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people believe that life in a big city is difficult while others say that it is more convenient. What are the advantages and disadvantages of living in big cities?

Band-9 Samples: Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Some people prefer to go to health clubs and gyms for health care, some say the walking and climbing stairs are more effective. Discuss both vies and give your opinion.