There will be a traditional celebration in your country and you want to invite your friend from an English speaking country . Write him/her a letter and invite your friend. Explain what happens at the party describe the tradition and why itʼs important in your country say why itʼs important for your friend to be there .

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Dear Ann, I hope you're doing well. I'm writing

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letter to invite you to the Diwali celebrations that I'm hosting,

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Saturday. I know I've invited you at

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short notice, but I recall you telling me that you were free on

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day. Diwali is a traditional event in my culture, which we celebrate every year. The reason

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why we celebrate

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event is because of a myth. A god named Rama killed a Ravana, a

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demon. We spend the day eating delicious food and lighting oil lamps. I know how much you love my mom's cooking, so I think you will be excited to come! I invited you as you are my best friend. You have been there beside me during my tough times

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year, and I want you to celebrate with me on

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. I shouldn't be saying

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, but I have a

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waiting for you as

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part of our tradition. I guess you have to attend the event to see it yourself!

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wait to see you on Saturday. Happy Diwali! Lots of Love,

Ramyen

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ramyensangheran12Wed Jan 18 2023

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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