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Some people believe that exams are an inappropriate way of measuring student’s performance and should be replaced by continuous assessments. Do you agree or disagree with this view?

#people #exams #student’s #performance #assessments
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A number of people claim that
exams
 are not suitable to determine
student's
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students'
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 degrees and should be changed with continuous assessments. I agree with
this
 notion, due to the fact that I believe that young people should not be limited
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exam
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exams
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.
To begin
 with, the numerous studies conducted by advanced universities appear that growing
of
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a person is a
process
 which needs diverse probes to understand it properly.
In other words
, there
are
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 various
stage
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stages
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 from childhood to
mature
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 and
performances
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the performances
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 of students should be observed
constistently
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consistently
 by their teachers by using regular assessments.
For example
, a child who
have
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 pursued primary school is needed to evaluate
in
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on
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regular
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a regular
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 basis to see
changing
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on
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 his
cognative
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cognitive
 or educational levels.
Therefore
, continuous assessment
enable
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 lecturers to
insight
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have insight
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 into
this
 sophisticated
process
 which is mentioned above.
On the other hand
, it is known that
exams
has
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 been essential to determine specific capabilities for diverse purposes. To illustrate, numerous countries have been using
exams
 to hire
employee
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employees
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such
 as teachers who want to work for
government
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the government
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, because
exams
 provide certain results. In fact, if these states had not executed
this
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these exams
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exams
, it would be challenging to understand which candidate should be hired, due to
lack
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 of data which belongs to
person
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the person
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 who
desire
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 to work. Yet, except
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 certain
sitiations
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situations
 which are caused by
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 of
system
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,
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growing
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the growing
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process
 of young should
be
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prefered
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preferred
consistent
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by consistent
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 evaluations. In
conclude
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,
although
 some advantages
using
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of using
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exams
 to determine
level
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the level
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 of
student
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students
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 which unfortunately caused by inappropriate
implements
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 in the educational system, according to many studies evaluating the young should be carried out regularly. İf government can apply a proper
process
 from primary schools to follow
degrees
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the degrees
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 of students, it would not be
neccesary
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necessary
using
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the test
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test
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tests
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 to see
level
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the level
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 of the young.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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