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Nowadays,many people choose to be self-employed,rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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In recent years,
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more people have decided to
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 as self-employed, leaving the safety of
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 as a regular employee. In
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 essay, I will explain the reasons why
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 might be happening, describing the possible pros and cons.
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 with, I believe that the cause of
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 situation could be found in an increase in technology’s development. In fact, with the raising of technology, many other types of jobs are born,
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 as the creation of shops online.
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, people have decided to be self-employed, working from home, without having a superior that
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 on their life. In fact,
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, a self-employed can decide where and how many hours want to
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. No one decides for him, which is a great advantage, as he can feel free to live the life he has always imagined. Personally, I would really love to
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 from home, dedicating time to my personal activities, and earning thanks to my personal ideas.
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, there are some disadvantages.
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a self-employed, who decides to start his own shop has to open a Vat number, which is not simple.
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, it is not easy to create a successful idea that sells itself,
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 a self-employer needs to know a lot of info about how
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 works and if he has no personal knowledge about the product that he wants to sell, he must have someone to trust, which is not easy as well, nowadays.
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 there seem to be many cons, I believe that if there is willingness anything is possible, even creating an own happy life, by working as self-employed.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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