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Some people believe that educational success depends on good teachers, with others believe that students attitude are important discuss both and give your opinion?

#people #success #teachers #students #attitude
Few are convinced that
teachers
 and their ability to educate students
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 the key to educational success, while others' opinion is a
student
's willingness to study. It cannot be denied that
teachers
 are one of the few
personals
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 in a child's life, who have the utmost responsibility in
upbringing
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a
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child, both in education and moral discipline. There is no doubt that a child learns from the surrounding he/she is growing in, especially in a school environment.
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Multiple
 researches and statistical
evidences
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evidence
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 show that 90% of children who have been taught by a
skillful
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 teacher have had flourished lives outside school.
Therefore
, I believe a caring and talented teacher would be a perfect example, contributing to a youngster's educational victories.
However
, it should not be forgotten that
teachers
 are just the catalyst for a
student
's
acadamic
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academic
 achievements. Ask yourself
this
 question; is it fair to say that
teachers
 are the root cause for a
student
's incapability in comprehending what is being taught? Intuitively, children should have equal, or even more, responsibility to
aquire
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acquire
 the knowledge taught by their
proffessors
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professors
. If a
student
 is not keen to learn, he/she is to blame for their failure.
I
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 my personal opinion, I believe that both teacher and
student
 need to constructively participate in a school environment to
acheive
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achieve
an
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acadamic
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academic
 success.
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