Write about the following topic. Some people think that government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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As the
food
industry in the world is developing various types of
food
which are healthy and nonhealthy are introduced to the market.
As a result
,
obesity
in
children
is increasing at an alarming
rate
due to different types of
food
introduced to
children
. A majority of people hold the view that
authorities
should be responsible for the increase in the
obesity
rate
of
children
. I partly agree with the above-mentioned statement because
parents
are
also
responsible for their
children
's
weight
. The following essay will elaborate
further
on the topic with examples. Commencing, it is true that
authorities
in different countries hold the responsibility for the nation's
children
's
obesity
rate
because
firstly
, government organizations provide the approval for
food
companies to publish advertisements regarding fast
food
which is unhealthy for youngsters.
Moreover
, the
food
stalls which are located on pavements sell
food
items for a very cheap price. As an example, street vendors sell
food
near a majority of schools for a cheap price like a burger for $2, and these
food
are made out of unhealthy essentials.
Secondly
, the government market high-calorie
food
and sugar beverages that give rise to high
weight
in
children
,
besides
,
children
get addicted to sweet and
food
which is presentable inform of them rather than
food
such
as vegetables or fruits.
On the other hand
, it is not only
authorities
who are liable for the
weight
problem of
children
,
parents
are the main group of people who are responsible for the epidemic. It is because nowadays
parents
are busy with their work-life
instead
of making a home-cooked meal they tend to buy
food
from outlets
such
as Mac or Kfc,
moreover
, some households make predicate
food
such
as pizza for their
children
. As a consequence
children
are unable to develop a healthy diet. As an example, in many western countries
parents
or caregivers do not have any intention to feed their
children
nutritious
food
since they focus more on their professional life.
Moreover
, since a majority of
parents
have a hectic routine they are facing repercussions of teaching their
children
good healthy habits. In conclusion, I partially agree that government is liable for the
weight
disorder in
children
because they focus more on economic enhancement rather than
children
's health. Other than the
authorities
,
parents
are the major group of people in society who are in control of
children
's
obesity
rate
.
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