Many people feel the urban encivronments are more unhealthy than they have ever been What do you think are the main causes of the problem? What measures can be effective in tackling this problem ?

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level
of pollution has
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increased
dastically
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drastically
in city areas. It is
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argued
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by many people that due to
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enormous changes,
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of these locations, is not good for human
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health
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to
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my point of view,
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development of industries, more usage of transportation and plastic products, are
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reasons
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these problems. It can be controlled by some
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important
methods.
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and
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, there are
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plenty
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responsible for
unhealthy
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an unhealthy
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environment.
Firstly
, many
industires
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industries
produce gases and water which are
harmfull
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harmful
to all living things on the earth.
Secondly
, People prefer private
vehicles
to commute, which was 60
persant
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per cent
less in past days than now. To illustrate,
WHO
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surveyed
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of air pollution
of
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last
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25 years and revealed that, usage of transport facilities, urban areas have
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more.
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,
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of
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plastic
packegine
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packaging
is enormous. To solve
this
situetion
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situation
, Government should impose some strict rules on commercial units. Not only that but
also
they
encorage
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encourage
people to use public transport
instade
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instead
of
porivate
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private
vehicles
.
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, gases and water must
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pass
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through the cleaning procedure before releasing from the
fectories
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factories
.
Besides
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that government should provide free public
trnasport
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transport
to decrease the usage of private
vehicles
.
Furthermore
,
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individuals
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should follow the rules and participate in
this
mission. To conclude, wastage produced by
fectories
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factories
, more
vehicles
on the road and undestroyable things
such
as plastic are
harmfull
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harmful
to
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the environment
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. Demand is very high in developed areas. It can
be stop
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the growing effect by taking some easy steps.
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