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Some people say that television is useful for education, while others say it is useful only for entertainment. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some
people
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 argue that
television
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 helps in learning while others believe that its only purpose is to entertain us.
Although
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television
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 is widely used for enjoyment and leisure, in my opinion, it
also
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 helps in other ways like getting
news
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 and information from all over the world. For decades,
people
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 have been watching
television
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 for fun and leisure because it is the most common
entertainment
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 product in every household.
Furthermore
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, it offers a variety of channels and
programs
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 with just
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a clicks
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clicks
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 of some buttons which help children and adults to relax and enjoy
when
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themselves when
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 they feel tired after studies or work.
Entertainment
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programs
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such
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 as The Kapil Sharma Show have always been the most popular
programs
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 because they spread laughter and joy among
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people
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 and help them unwind the day.
However
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, I think that other than
entertainment
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,
people
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 have many reasons to watch
television
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such
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 as
getting
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to get
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 educated about major events around the world. On the other side, many
people
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 argue that beyond
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entertainment
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, there are various
news
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 and educational
programs
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 aired on
television
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 that are watched by a large number of
people
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. Many shows on
television
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 play a vital role in educating citizens about various issues and current affairs and
help
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helping
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 them increase their knowledge. Many
news
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programs
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,
for example
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, Prime-Time with Ravish Kumar on NDTV pick one of the events
happened
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that happened
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 during the day and discuss different perspectives about it in
details
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detail
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 and educate
people
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 on how it affects their lives.
Moreover
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, these types of shows have become more interesting and entertaining due to the use of advanced technology and presentation methods. In conclusion, while
the
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most
people
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 watch
television
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 for pleasure and
relax
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relaxation
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, I believe that it is not fair to tag it as an
entertainment
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 tool because it is still a main source of
news
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 and information for the majority
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people
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of people
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 around the world.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • educational programs
  • informative documentaries
  • interactive learning
  • entertaining content
  • reality shows
  • cartoons
  • intellectual development
  • parental guidance
  • screen time
  • creative thinking
  • educational potential
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