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Working abroad can help employees earn a great deal of money and gain more benefits. However, some people think this trend has many negative impacts. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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 of females per 100 males in all degrees of education. Overall, it can be seen that at the three various stages of schooling the number of students in developed
countries
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elementary
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 of girls in developing nations reached 83 students in 1990 and 87 in 2000, meanwhile
industrialized
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countries
 females’ school enrolment was quite higher, during the
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 period the number of pupils rose from 93 to 96 girls of the total. The secondary school female statistic shows that the figure
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 girls was gradually increasing from 1990 to 2000 in both types of
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poor
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wealthy ones in
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1990. The average
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high school education was significantly higher than others.
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the frames, emergent nations felt the rapid decrease, followed by a rise in the difference between states
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Professional growth
  • Cultural shock
  • Remittances
  • Global networking
  • Expatriate
  • Brain drain
  • Reverse culture shock
  • Cross-cultural communication
  • Exploitation
  • Professional migration
  • Economic benefits
  • Bilateral agreements
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