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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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As to the problem of in which
country
 should certain
professions
work
, different people have different views, I will discuss both views and give my own opinion below. Some people believe that doctors and engineers should
work
at
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 the
country
 where they receive their professional training. They argue that the state has devoted much
in
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to
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 supporting their academic training by offering
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the award
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award
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awards
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, giving
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an allowance
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allowance
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, providing training facilities at a low price, offering precious internship opportunities and so on. These
professions
 receive these benefits almost for free, so it is reasonable that they pay the state back by working in
this
country
 so as to create value for the nation. Others,
however
, think that doctors and engineers should have their own choices as to where to
work
 since a considerable portion of these
professions
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professionals
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 receive their training at private institutions and do not require the government to cover their
expense
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expenses
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 for mastering these professional skills. If all
professions
 are obliged to
work
 for the
country
 where they gain their skills, it would be unequal for
this
 part of working
professions
 since they do not owe the state anything and need not pay back in the way of working for the
country
. Personally, I agree with the latter.
Since
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although
 some
professions
 rely heavily on the government allowance to finish their program and should pay the
tax payers
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taxpayers
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 back
though
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through
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 the outcome of their
work
,
yet
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a considerable part of
professions
 pay for the training by themselves.
Also
, there is the situation that the profession takes the program in several countries and gets financial support from different states.
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 these two occasions, forcing them to
work
 for a certain
country
 is surely unreasonable.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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