Some people say that spending the national budget on space exploration is a waste of resources. They insist that those funds should be spent on people living on earth. Do you agree or disagree?
We are living in an advanced world. People's lives survival of human
has
become more sophisticated in terms of standard of living Change the verb form
have
what
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than
it
used to be earlier because of the development in the field of research and science.Correct pronoun usage
they
However
, there is notion
among some folks that Add an article
a notion
the notion
instead
of allocating the country fund on
astronomy research, those funds should Change preposition
to
utilise
on pupils residing on earth. I Add a missing verb
be utilise
am not firmly agree
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do not firmly agree
to
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with
this
and my perspective to
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on
this
will be outlined in the following paragraphs.
To commence with, I would like to say that with the introduction of various life saving
drugs in the field of medical death rates in people Add a hyphen
life-saving
has
reduced significantly as compared to what Correct subject-verb agreement
have
it
used to be some decades ago. Correct pronoun usage
they
As a result
, many countries are facing problems related to overpopulation which has become a burning issue nowadays that needs to be addressed. With the increase in population
the demand Add a comma
,population
of
utilising natural Change preposition
for
resources
is at alarming
rate,Add an article
an alarming
therefore
many of the national resources
such
as water, wood
used for paper making across the globe Add an article
the wood
is
depleting. Correct subject-verb agreement
are
Money
financed to space exploration agencies will help Add an article
The money
astronaut
to explore other planets in the universe and get to know about the possibility of life there. There was Add an article
the astronaut
a recent news
that popped up in the international media Remove the article
recent news
a piece of recent news
channals
which stated that NASA has found various evidence of Correct your spelling
channels
resources
that is
necessary forAdd an article
the
at
Mars planet during its universe exploration.
On the flip side, My argument is Change preposition
on
weekend
by the fact that how could a country think and use Correct your spelling
weakened
hard earned
money of its peopleAdd a hyphen
hard-earned
into
expensive research programsChange preposition
for
.
pupils give taxes to Change the punctuation
?
government
so that government can use it for developing their quality of life by providing them with certain benefits Add an article
the government
such
as health facilities, developing infrastructure, free education etc.
To conclude, space exploration should be encouraged by government
to find Add an article
the government
solution
to the depletion of Add an article
a solution
the solution
resources
but at the same time
it should Add a comma
,time
also
imposed
certain strict laws Change the verb form
impose
such
as one child one
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and one
parents
should have can reduce the hazards Change to a singular noun
parent
on
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to
environment
.Correct article usage
the environment
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