Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we are no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

At the present time, by increasing number of
ads
people
are influenced to
purchase
something which they watched
on
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the advertisement even though
this
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products
are not need
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for them, while some
people
believe that our consideration for
ads
will not be same in the upcoming years. In my opinion,
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advertisement
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advertisements
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will serve many years for us to
purchase
goods without any longer
think
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. For most, advertisements
seems
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like no stay here and
people
do not think much longer about that.
In other words
, an increasing number of
adverts
on
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the
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everywhere are annoying many individuals by repeating and repeating the same
ads
,
therefore
even today
people
are not paying attention and losing their own interest for
such
kind of
reason
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. A good example can be my grandfather because when his eyes glimpse
to
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adverts
on the television, he practically always
say
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switch
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it to another channel because watching
the
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only one type of
ads
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makes him irritated.
However
, I believe that the
tempt
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of advertisements will continue to keep the
growth-rate
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of interest of
people
. As
adverts
has
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some involving features with some  emotions which can oblige humans to pick
goods
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the goods
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up
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which they saw
on
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the advertisement.
For example
, if my little brother
watch
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somethings
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something
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on
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the
adverts
like toys or stuffed animal, he
ask
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about
purchase
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it
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,
although
he has lots of toys as same
like
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as
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he watched.
Thus
,
this
process of advertising never
loss
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and may continue to increase its emotions which can persuade
people
to
purchase
products. In conclusion, an increasing number of
ads
may make angry the individuals, but I feel that advertisements keep
continue
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to persuade
the
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apply
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people
to buy the goods which they saw
on
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the
ads
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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