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Some people believe that schools are no longer necessary, because students can get so much information through the Internet, and study just as well at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #schools #students #information #internet #study #home
Since the
inovation
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innovation
 of digital learning
platform
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 appear in the middle of
pandemic
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the pandemic
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 situation, the learning activity has moved to
online
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the online
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 form. In order to that, most people are of the opinion that gaining
education
 from institutions like
school
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schools
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 is unnecessary. In fact, students can get knowledge from
internet
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the internet
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 as technology has dramatically increased.
Although
,
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 pupils can study
remote
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remotely
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, the presence of teachers is outweigh everything, and
therefore
 I strongly disagree with
this
 opinion.
The access
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 to information is greatly unlimited and easy to get. There is a drawback
from
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technology
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technological
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 advance, which can lead pupils to access
unappropriate
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inappropriate
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 content since
internet
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the internet
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provide
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 too much information. A good example of
this
 is we can easily
found
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 random students barely talking with nice attitudes and meanings because they
seen
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 it
from
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 social media and online games. If they spent their whole day with their gadget, it will destruct their character and personality. While the role of
school
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the school
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 is to provide a positive environment and broaden their ways to be competent and prosper as a person.
Moreover
, the majority of parents are can not stay 24 hours watching their
kids
 and guiding them to learn. If the
kids
learning
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 individually, nobody will
gave
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 enough attention to them and
this
 can lead to
confusing
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the confusing
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situation
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 for them. From the beginning, one of the aims of
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the school
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school
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schools
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 is to watch their
kids
 and make sure that they have a good quality
of
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education
.
In addition
, the
kids
 still require guidance and someone who can tell them the good and the wrong things.
Spent
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 their time at
school
 is a good decision, so that teacher, who is
professional
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 in
this
 field can educate them and lighten
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their parents
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parents
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parents'
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 burden. In conclusion,
education
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educational
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 institutions
are still play
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the
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an
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paramounth
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paramount
 job in terms of
prepare
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 our
kids
 to be
a
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great
individual
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individuals
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 in
this
 society. I did not give a view that pupils no need to attend
school
 anymore. Indeed, all the
technology
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inovations
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innovations
innovation
makes
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make
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 life
more easy
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easier
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, yet we can not forget that
education
 is way more than books and knowledge.
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