Write a letter to your friend who lives in an another country and in your letter: a. Invite him/her to a public event in your country. b. Describe the public event c. Explain about other plans you have or your friend when he/she will visit.

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Dear Suzanne, I hope you are hale and hearty. How is the weather? I am writing

this

letter in

regards

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invite

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you to India for

Ganpati

Festival.

Ganpati

festival's celebration

begans

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begins

began

on 10th September. It is celebrated for 10 days. I remember we were discussing how you like Marathi

music

and

dance

. Throughout

this

festival, you will be able to witness different forms of Marathi

music

and

dance

. So, I am excited to invite you

for

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this

festival. I would like to give you more information about

this

festival.

Ganpati

is Hindu God and

this

festival is to bring

Ganpati

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your home or in the building to pray for peace and well-being of the families and country.

Ganpati

is considered

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apply

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the humble, kind and yet strongest God so

people

pray to be like him. All

the

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apply

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10 days are celebratory but 1st and

last

day

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are

the

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grand celebration.

People

bring gigantic

music

systems or bands or DJs to

dance

and enjoy Marathi

music

and

dance

Therefore

, you will hear

music

and see

people

dancing in happiness all over Mumbai.

Additionally

people

distribute various types of sweets which are specially made for only

this

festival. My

favorite

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sweet is `Malai modak` - which is very similar to

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the Kismi

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Kismi

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Kimi

candy we used to have a lot during our childhood. While you visit, I insist you stay at my place. My house is located in Borivali which is one of the prime locations for the

Ganpati

festival.

Additionally

, we will go around Mumbai to see various famous places like Gateway of India, Haji Ali mosque,

Marine

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drive and eat a lot of different street foods. All these spots are pretty near to my place, so

commute

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will be easy. I am very excited by the idea of you visiting for

this

festival. Looking forward to

hear

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a positive reply from you. Take care, Nidhi

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

315 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Write a letter to your friend who lives in an another country and in your letter: a. Invite him/her to a public event in your country. b. Describe the public event c. Explain about other plans you have or your friend when he/she will visit.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

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Please outline your plans and strategies for actively participating in local and international communities throughout the IISMA program, and provide some concrete examples.

In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone app is becoming increasingly common. Does these development have more advantages or disadvantages?

Todays schools should teach their students how to survive financially in the world today. to what extent do you agree disaree with this statement?