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Many people say that a person's success is a result of the way they have been bought up their parents

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Many individuals argue that a person's
success
 is a result of the way they have been raised
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their background. I agree with
this
 idea of statement. Though it is true that
success
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the success
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 of the individual
depend
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 on their
parents
.
First
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 and
main
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 reason is about how they are helping
to
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their
children
 for chose their
interest
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.
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,
from
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 my earlier
years
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 I attended
a
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different
kind
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 of courses and it makes
a
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little bit easy to find my field. The
second
 reason is if their
parents
 grow up their
children
to
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 be honest it will be easy for their improvement.
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example
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 I recently noticed that 35%
people
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 are honest from around the world and almost 34,5% of
this
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people
 achieve
to
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their aims faster
then
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 others. Other
people
 believe that
parents
 did not impact for
success
to
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 their
children
. Because from their point of
view
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 young
people
 can
makes
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make
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right
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a right
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 decision without their
parents
.
For
instance
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 they can achieve
to
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success
on
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 their business by making mistakes.
Also
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 they
are consider
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 that
parents
 did not impact
on
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their life because growing up by
parents
 is effective.
For
example
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 growing
children
 by
parents
 it is effective because
in
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 most occasions they
are
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receive education outside. Overall, it is
a
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partly true that
children
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arechildren
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 able to achieve their
success
 without
parents
. But it would be faster
achieve
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to achieve
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for
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success
 by helping
father
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the father
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 and mother.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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