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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we are no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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•In our modern life, technology has been developing almost every day and many big
companies
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 prefer introducing their new
products
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 through
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social media networks.
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 the majority of individuals emphasize that advertising is one of the
most
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best
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way
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 to persuade us to purchase
products
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. Other
humans
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 point out that advertising is extremely widespread currently,
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 many
humans
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 are not paying much concentration
for
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 it. From my point of view, it is
more
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 beneficial
way
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 to purchase high-quality
of
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goods. •On the one hand, advertising has
becoming
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 well-known day-by-day because it is the best successful
way
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 for the customers and many big
companies
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 try to
advertising
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advertise
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 their new
products
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 in order to introduce their
products
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for
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 inhabitants through the internet and it gives a big opportunity for large
companies
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 to increase
number
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the number
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 of customers.
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, in my country, every 15 minutes,
ads
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 are broadcast, which
a
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great
way
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 to save time, even if it is expensive and now the number of internet users
are
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 increasing.
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advertisements
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 are becoming popular. •
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, other individuals strongly believe that
,
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nowadays all
companies
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 try to
advertising
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 their
products
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 through the internet and television to sell all their
products
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 without challenges.
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result
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this
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 leads to
increase
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an increase
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of
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in
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 poor-quality
advertisements
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.
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 that, many individuals are not paying more attention
for
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to
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 them and as the number of
advertisements
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 increase, the quality of adverse
products
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decrease
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 and
this
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 causes people to lose trust in
advertisements
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. •In conclusion, the majority of
humans
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 say that
advertisements
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 are the biggest factor in the development of big
companies
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 and it gives
opportunity
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an opportunity
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 for them to achieve success. Other
humans
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 emphasize that
advertisements
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 are becoming less reliable
day-by-day
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day by day
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 and people are not paying much attention to them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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