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Influence of human beings on the worlds ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of biodiversity. Causes and solutions

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It is an irrefutable fact that human activities, over the years, have drastically impacted our natural ecosystem,
thus
 leading to the tragic extinction of many endangered species. Notwithstanding,
this
 essay will delve into the causes behind
this
 unforeseen occurrence and provide some solutions to
this
 menace.
To begin
 with, the
first
 and
foremost
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 cause of the detrimental fall of animal and plant species is human evolution. The global population has experienced a significant surge over the
last
 millennium, leading to a rising need for resources,
such
 as electricity, water and food.
Additionally
, the increased number of people over the world has resulted in a major need for accommodation, causing land deforestation to build new establishments.
Therefore
, the aforementioned human needs have brought negative impacts,
such
 as air
pollution
, carbon emissions from cars, water contamination and noise
pollution
. Admittedly, there are some solutions to control and prevent
further
 negative impacts on our ecosystem.
First
 off, governments should enact single-day bans, to control air
pollution
.
Additionally
, campaign awareness might be needed to properly educate people to respect and protect our planet.
Secondly
, every single person has the responsibility to mitigate
further
 damages, by implementing a few daily actions.
For instance
, the global population should adopt proper disposal of their waste.
Moreover
, opting for public transportation rather than using private vehicles may reduce
pollution
. To sum up, there are several causes that are damaging our
environment
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,
such
 as human evolution and overpopulation.
However
, I believe that both government and people must adopt responsible behaviours towards our biodiversity, to preserve and protect natural resources.
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